请大家估计一下这篇短文能得多少分?（满分15分）这是家庭作业,自己写了,没底子,大家看看能得多少分,hello,i'm li hua,my mother was fall into ill during my father went out a work for a long time.at that time,i f

请大家估计一下这篇短文能得多少分?（满分15分）这是家庭作业,自己写了,没底子,大家看看能得多少分,hello,i'm li hua,my mother was fall into ill during my father went out a work for a long time.at that time,i f
请大家估计一下这篇短文能得多少分?（满分15分）

这是家庭作业,自己写了,没底子,大家看看能得多少分,
hello,i'm li hua,my mother was fall into ill during my father went out a work for a long time.
at that time,i found my mother was lying in the bed,and had a cold,i had to apply some my experience to look after her,one of these method is that let her drank some water without sporting.finally,my mother got health before my father came back the home
有几个词抄错了，抱歉。hello，i'm li hua，my mother was fall into ill during my father went out to【不是a】 work for a long time。
at that time，i found my mother was lying in the bed，and had a cold，i had to apply some my experience to look after her，one of these method is that let her drank some water without sporting。finally，my mother got health before my father came back the home

请大家估计一下这篇短文能得多少分?（满分15分）这是家庭作业,自己写了,没底子,大家看看能得多少分,hello,i'm li hua,my mother was fall into ill during my father went out a work for a long time.at that time,i f
my mother was fall into ill was用错的应该是现在进行时 lying in the bed,and had a cold应该是having 有and 2边的语态应相同 apply some 固定搭配apply for这句就不怎么好 改成 I had to try my best to looking after my mother 估计有9分左右

我会给你6、7分吧。因为文章太短且不精彩。还有很多语法问题。。如果是在我的国家，连上方instruction 都是在英语的。。如果要我的模范答案，请告诉我。。

Hello，I'm Li Hua，my mother fell ill when my father went out to work for a long time。At that time, I found my mother lying in bed, she had a cold. I had to apply some of my experience to look after her...

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Hello，I'm Li Hua，my mother fell ill when my father went out to work for a long time。At that time, I found my mother lying in bed, she had a cold. I had to apply some of my experience to look after her，one of these methods is to let her drink some water。Finally，my mother got well before my father came back home.只能帮你到这了！

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