英语作文评析（七年级水平） 好的有追加,正文如下Last Monday,Peter took a book to school library.He wanted to return the book.Miss White looked for the book and found it was broken.She was very angry and asked him.Peter said he is

英语作文评析（七年级水平） 好的有追加,正文如下Last Monday,Peter took a book to school library.He wanted to return the book.Miss White looked for the book and found it was broken.She was very angry and asked him.Peter said he is
英语作文评析（七年级水平） 好的有追加,正文如下
Last Monday,Peter took a book to school library.He wanted to return the book.Miss White looked for the book and found it was broken.She was very angry and asked him.Peter said he is very sorry,he made the book broken.Miss White told he have to use the carting knife、paper and glue to mend the book.Then Peter said bye-bye to Miss White and took the broken book home to mends it looks new.

英语作文评析（七年级水平） 好的有追加,正文如下Last Monday,Peter took a book to school library.He wanted to return the book.Miss White looked for the book and found it was broken.She was very angry and asked him.Peter said he is
1、Last Monday,Peter took a book to school library.除去school,累赘,无须强调school,另外要添加冠词：Last Monday,Peter took a book to the library.
2、Miss White looked for the book and found it was broken.应该是checked the book,因为look for是寻找的意思,而check才是检查的意思
3、Peter said he is very sorry,he made the book broken.因为整个句子都是用过去时,所以应为he was very sorry,另两个句子之间要有连词或将其变成主从句的关系.这两个句子之间是因果关系,因而用for.改成：Peter said he was very sorry,for he made the book broken.
4、Miss White told he have to use the carting knife、paper and glue to mend the book.told后的宾语应该用him,然后同上所述,have应该用过去式had.另,英语中没有顿号,表示罗列同类事物时应该用逗号.最后,句子表达的是一种要求,可以将句子简化成：Miss White asked him to use the carting knife,paper and glue to mend the book.也可以保持原来的表达为：Miss White told him that he had to use the carting knife,paper and glue to mend the book.
5、Then Peter said bye-bye to Miss White and took the broken book home to mends it looks new.to后应该用原形mend,mend已经有回复原样的意思,所以looks new就可以省略,同时,mends it looks new的表达是不正确的,若要这样表达,可以用因果从句.改成：Then Peter said bye-bye to Miss White and took the broken book home to mend it
因为是七年级,所以只是针对语法给出修改意见,如果有修改表达的需要,

Last Monday, Peter took a book to the school library because he wanted to return the book. After examing the book, Miss White found out that it was damaged. She was a bite upset about the situation an...

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Last Monday, Peter took a book to the school library because he wanted to return the book. After examing the book, Miss White found out that it was damaged. She was a bite upset about the situation and asked Peter what had happened to the book. Peter felt sorry that the book was damaged and ask if there was anything he could do to make up for his mistake. Miss White told him that he would have to use a carting knife, paper, and glue to fix the book. So Peter took the book home to fix it, and a few days later it looked just like new. 总体来讲还不错，以一些小小的语法问题，要注意句子间的连接应更有连贯性。有些用词不准确，比如 broken和 mend,以后慢慢积累会好的。继续努力！

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Miss White looked for the book and found it was broken-------Miss White looked at the book and found it was broken
Peter said he is very sorry, he made the book broken. -----------Peter sa...

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Miss White looked for the book and found it was broken-------Miss White looked at the book and found it was broken
Peter said he is very sorry, he made the book broken. -----------Peter said he was very sorry, and said he made the book broken
Miss White told he have to use the carting knife、paper and glue to mend the book. ----------
Miss White told he had to use the carting knife、paper and glue to mend the book.
Then Peter said bye-bye to Miss White and took the broken book home to mends it looks new. ----------- Then Peter said bye-bye to Miss White and took the broken book home to mended it .
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