雅思牛人们帮忙改改口语part 2话题吧Describe your favorite room or apartment.-where it is-how long you have lived there-what rooms and furniture it has-why you like itMy favorite room is my den in my parents’ flat.I have lived there sin

雅思牛人们帮忙改改口语part 2话题吧Describe your favorite room or apartment.-where it is-how long you have lived there-what rooms and furniture it has-why you like itMy favorite room is my den in my parents’ flat.I have lived there sin
雅思牛人们帮忙改改口语part 2话题吧
Describe your favorite room or apartment.
-where it is
-how long you have lived there
-what rooms and furniture it has
-why you like it
My favorite room is my den in my parents’ flat.I have lived there since we moved two years ago.
It is a room where I can do my own things without interruption.You know,I can surf the internet in the morning,in the afternoon,or in the evening,even though at midnight.And my parents normally do not know what I am doing in my den.So even though my room is not big enough and just has general furniture,like a bookcase with a desk and a chair,a wardrobe where I can put all my clothes and accessories,and a 1.8 meters size bed,I love my room very much.
What I ought to stress is that my room has blue walls – which is my favorite color – is the most important reason why I love it.I think blue color represents calming vast seas that can relax me when I feel pressure.And it gives me dreams that have no boundaries.I like think everything whether it realistic or not.I often feel happy to do that.
我底子真的很不好,什么语法啊,时态啊都不懂,请各位牛人不用手下留情,多多指教吧

雅思牛人们帮忙改改口语part 2话题吧Describe your favorite room or apartment.-where it is-how long you have lived there-what rooms and furniture it has-why you like itMy favorite room is my den in my parents’ flat.I have lived there sin
1别用den 不地道.用my bedroom或者my private room.
2第二段第二行去掉though.even at midnight
3第二段第二行 and 换成because
4第三段第三行连词用的不恰当.so even though 去掉.
5第三段第三行and just 改成but it has……
6第三段第一行 ought to stress 改成 have to say.
7is the most important reason why I love it.--------That7is the most important reason why I love it
8pressure----stressful
9 I like think ----I like imagining
10第三段后半段 考官未必能明白哦 太中国思维了