帮我看一下这篇英语作文哪里错了Nowadays,people have a lot of pressure.Where stress come from?What should they do to solve these problems?Parents always want their children to be number one.Therefore they offer their children various cla

帮我看一下这篇英语作文哪里错了Nowadays,people have a lot of pressure.Where stress come from?What should they do to solve these problems?Parents always want their children to be number one.Therefore they offer their children various cla
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Nowadays,people have a lot of pressure.Where stress come from?What should they do to solve these problems?
Parents always want their children to be number one.Therefore they offer their children various class.However,many children hate most of the class.What's more,the children lost their freedom.In my opinion,parents should give their children more freedom and let them study independently.
Adults also has pressure.They should compete with their colleagues.It is hard to get appreciation from their boss.They must try their best to get along well with their customers.I think they should have more time to relax.And they can also talk to their friends,companion or the elder to solve the problem.
The elder has retired.It is time to enjoy themselves.However they also have pressure.They have no income.When they get older,they will have a lot of health problems.And they often feel lonely.So I suggest the young care for their parents more and spend more time with them.

帮我看一下这篇英语作文哪里错了Nowadays,people have a lot of pressure.Where stress come from?What should they do to solve these problems?Parents always want their children to be number one.Therefore they offer their children various cla
第一段 Where stress come from?应该是 Where does the stress come from?
第二段 class 改为 classes
第三段Adults also has pressure.has 改为have,boss 改为bosses
这是从语法方面来说的.
内容上：
第二段主要描述的是孩子们的压力,要具体说父母望子成龙望女成凤,所以给孩子报了很多特长班之类的课程,父母的期望给了孩子很大的压力,让孩子失去了自由,父母要理解孩子,不要给孩子报那么多课程,尽量选择孩子感兴趣的课程,这样才能两全其美.
最后最好总结一下,要不然太突兀的就结束了.

如今，人们有一个很大的压力。压力从何而来？要解决这些问题，他们应该做什么？
父母总是希望自己的孩子成为第一。因此，他们为自己的孩子提供各种类。然而，许多孩子恨大多数类。更重要的是，孩子们失去了自由。在我看来，父母应该给孩子更多自由，让他们自主学习。
成人也有压力。他们应该和他们的同事竞争。很难从他们的老板会欣赏。他们必须尽力相处的客户。我认为他们应该有更多的时间放松自己。它们还可以...

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如今，人们有一个很大的压力。压力从何而来？要解决这些问题，他们应该做什么？
父母总是希望自己的孩子成为第一。因此，他们为自己的孩子提供各种类。然而，许多孩子恨大多数类。更重要的是，孩子们失去了自由。在我看来，父母应该给孩子更多自由，让他们自主学习。
成人也有压力。他们应该和他们的同事竞争。很难从他们的老板会欣赏。他们必须尽力相处的客户。我认为他们应该有更多的时间放松自己。它们还可以和他们的朋友，伴侣或老年人解决问题。
老年人退休了。是时候享受自己。但是他们也有压力。他们没有收入。当他们长大以后，他们会有很多的健康问题。他们经常感到孤独。所以我建议年轻的照顾他们的父母更多的与他们花更多的时间。
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