SAT作文修改本人第一次写SAT作文,可能问题较多,希望有高手指导Are all important discoveries the result of focusing on one subject?I do not think that all important discoveries are the result of focusing on one subject.Though it i

SAT作文修改本人第一次写SAT作文,可能问题较多,希望有高手指导Are all important discoveries the result of focusing on one subject?I do not think that all important discoveries are the result of focusing on one subject.Though it i
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本人第一次写SAT作文,可能问题较多,希望有高手指导
Are all important discoveries the result of focusing on one subject?
I do not think that all important discoveries are the result of focusing on one subject.Though it is true that most of the times,perseverance is a good thing,that’s not always the case.There are many instants in the history that proved knowing when to give up is sometimes even more important.
One such example would be Joule.Joule was a 19th century physicist.Today he is remembered all over the world for finding out the relationship between electricity and the amount of heat it generated.To celebrate his achievement,people now use his name,Joule,as the unit for work in physics.Few people know that before he devoted himself to studying electricity,he was a firm believer in the perpetual motion machine.He was fascinated by the idea that there could be a machine that moves by itself using no outside energy source.He spent years researching on this subject,but fruitless,of course.As we know today,because of the First Law of Thermodynamics,a perpetual motion machine can never be built.Consider,if Joule had spent his life on this,would he have still made such remarkable achievements to the world?No,I don’t think so.Fortunately,after a while,Joule began to doubt the actual existent of such a machine and gave up this project.He instead chose to work on electricity.This proved to be a wise decision.He made many important discoveries in this field.
Here is another example.When steam ships were first invented,people encountered an unexpected problem.When a steam ship goes on long journeys,algae would start to grow on the bottom of it.It would slow down the ship considerably and waste a lot of fuel.Many scientist of that time tried to find a cheap and convenient way to clean off the algae,but none of them succeeded.A young man at that time took an interest in this problem too.After many failed attempts,he gave up and turned to another route.He decided to work on a way to prevent the algae from sticking onto the ship at the first place.Not long after,he invented a paint that can have this effect.To this day,this paint is still widely used.
In life,no one can deny the use of patience,perseverance and concentration.Many great inventions were the result of these.But do they always lead people to success?That’s not true.Too much of those is just pure stubbornness.Pure stubbornness never gets people anywhere.A lot of times,knowing when to stop is even harder than keep going forward.After all,if you don’t stop,how can you see your mistakes?Only by giving up can you have chance to correct your mistakes and start over.

SAT作文修改本人第一次写SAT作文,可能问题较多,希望有高手指导Are all important discoveries the result of focusing on one subject?I do not think that all important discoveries are the result of focusing on one subject.Though it i
我写在括号里了,顺便纠正了下语法.
没做什么很大的改变,但是要是你觉得不够的话我可以在该.
‘I have a dream that one day…’Yeah,that is such a dream,it represent(s) the dream of all the black people,but only he(him),Martin Lunther King,said it out.Can we deny that he was a hero?Of course not ,because he spoke out at the risk of so many rejection(s),(he was not afraid to say what he thought,even when he knew there would be disagreements.) we should consider him as a true hero.
Heroes isn’t a few in our world.(你想说"there isn't only a few heros in our world"?)
The thing that is heavier drops quicker.This rule had been accepted by people for 2000 years.No one suspect it.However,with the development of science,some scientsists began to doubt it,but this rule had lasted so long that most of the scientists lacked the(had lack of) courage to say it out.Galileo,a famous scientist of ancient Greece,did not believe the rule,so he said out that it was wrong (so he said to people that it was wrong,out loud,避免过多重复的语句)and he conducted a famous experiment on Pizza Tower.The experiment proved that there is no relation(relationship?) between the weight and the speed of (an) object.The rule which(that has been) lasted for 2000 years was broken by Galileo(---) who was the only one had courage to say the was false.
You know Abraham Lincoln,right?Of course the Getty Sburg speech,right?When the whole coutry lose(lost) faith to win the war,Abraham Lincoln,the presidebt of United States,delegate a lot of patriots to give out the Gatty Sburg speech to inspire all the citizen of United States.He was the only one who dare to put out the speech in such dangerous situation.Finally,he led the American people to win the American Civil War.(,but)Unforantely this great hero was killed in 1865.He was such a hero,wasn’t he?
From the samples above,I understand (believe)that the true hero is the one who say(s) what they think when we ourselves lack of the courage to say it.Now I have a dream that one day I could be a hero,a true hero,what about you?

我写在括号里了,顺便纠正了下语法.
没做什么很大的改变,但是要是你觉得不够的话我可以在该.
‘I have a dream that one day…’Yeah,that is such a dream,it represent(s) the dream of all the black people,but only he(him),Martin Lunther King, s...

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我写在括号里了,顺便纠正了下语法.
没做什么很大的改变,但是要是你觉得不够的话我可以在该.
‘I have a dream that one day…’Yeah,that is such a dream,it represent(s) the dream of all the black people,but only he(him),Martin Lunther King, said it out.Can we deny that he was a hero?Of course not ,because he spoke out at the risk of so many rejection(s),(he was not afraid to say what he thought, even when he knew there would be disagreements.) we should consider him as a true hero.
Heroes isn’t a few in our world.(你想说"there isn't only a few heros in our world"?)
The thing that is heavier drops quicker.This rule had been accepted by people for 2000 years.No one suspect it.However,with the development of science,some scientsists began to doubt it,but this rule had lasted so long that most of the scientists lacked the(had lack of) courage to say it out. Galileo,a famous scientist of ancient Greece, did not believe the rule, so he said out that it was wrong (so he said to people that it was wrong, out loud, 避免过多重复的语句)and he conducted a famous experiment on Pizza Tower.The experiment proved that there is no relation(relationship?) between the weight and the speed of (an) object. The rule which(that has been) lasted for 2000 years was broken by Galileo(---) who was the only one had courage to say the was false.
You know Abraham Lincoln,right?Of course the Getty Sburg speech,right?When the whole coutry lose(lost) faith to win the war, Abraham Lincoln,the presidebt of United States, delegate a lot of patriots to give out the Gatty Sburg speech to inspire all the citizen of United States.He was the only one who dare to put out the speech in such dangerous situation. Finally,he led the American people to win the American Civil War.(, but)Unforantely this great hero was killed in 1865.He was such a hero, wasn’t he?
From the samples above, I understand (believe)that the true hero is the one who say(s) what they think when we ourselves lack of the courage to say it. Now I have a dream that one day I could be a hero,a true hero,what about you?

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